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4e is too verbose

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:05 am
by Username17
12 thousand words is a lot to describe a character class. But 4e goes way beyond that in its over-verbosity. Let's consider the basic core books:
Player's Handbook200,000 words
Dungeon Master's Guide150,000 words
Monster Manual175,000 words
Moby Dick187,000 words
Atlas Shrugged540,000 words

OK? That's fucked up. It is not reasonable to expect a 14 year old to read more than a half million words before they can DM a frickin game.

-Username17

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:13 am
by TheFlatline
Holy shit the PHB can't be 200,000 words... One of those doorstop novels that pass for the Wheel of Time clocks in around 250-300,000 words, and that's like 600 pages hardcover.

To give perspective, your average 400 page paperback fantasy novel is around 120,000 words long

Then again, the print is tiny compared to a hardcover. And there are 2-300 pages in the PHB if memory serves.

This is just... disgusting...

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:59 am
by Username17
It sure can. The PHB 1 is 316 pages. And it's not a novel sized - but a full sized coffee table book. One of those pages is worth about 800 words. The only reason the word count is so low is because it keeps calling time for full-page art an charts and stuff.

Now, the latter books are more restrained. The PHB 2 and 3 are both 224 pages, and Monster Manual 2 and 3 are as well, and along with the DMG 2 clock in at about 150,000 words each (The DMG 2 is 155k if you care about 3 sig figs). Of course, so is the original Adventurer's Vault.

The XXX Power books are shorter. They are 160 pages a piece and clock in at around 100k words a piece. Adventurer's Vault 2 is one of these.

And then we got the stuff that is only tangentially relevant to the franchise that no one likes or cares about. Open Grave is about 150k, Draconomicon I: Chromatic Dragons is ~175k. Draconomicon II: Fucking Metallic Dragons You Don't Care About is another 150k. Underdark is about 100k, so is Manual of the Planes and its sister publications: The Plane Below, The Plane Above, and The Demonomicon.
Draconomicon II: Chromatic Dragons175,000 Words
Forgotten Realms Campaign Guide175,000 Words
Eberron Campaign Guide175,000 Words
Player's Handbook 2150,000 Words
Dungeon Master's Guide 2150,000 Words
Monster Manual 2150,000 Words
Player's Handbook 3150,000 Words
Monster Manual 3150,000 Words
Adventurer's Vault150,000 Words
Open Grave: Secrets of the Undead150,000 Words
Draconomicon II: Metallic Dragons150,000 Words
Martial Power100,000 Words
Arcane Power100,000 Words
Divine Power100,000 Words
Primal Power100,000 Words
Psionic Power100,000 Words
Adventurer's Vault 2100,000 Words
Martial Power 2100,000 Words
Underdark100,000 Words
Dungeondelve100,000 Words
Manual of the Planes100,000 Words
The Plane Below: Elemental Chaos100,000 Words
The Plane Above: Secrets of the Astral Sea100,000 Words
The Demonomicon100,000 Words
Forgotten Realms Player's Guide100,000 Words
Eberron Player's Guide100,000 Words
Player's Strategy Guide100,000 Words
The Combined Works of the Wheel of Time3,430,682 words

4e is too verbose. I didn't even include stuff like Hammerfast, because I consider it to kind of be an adventure. Also, I did not include Darksun, because it seems unlikely to ever have its classes addressed in Adventurer's Vault or Arcane Power supplements.

-Username17

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 8:05 am
by TheFlatline
What could you possibly have to say about metallic dragons that takes up a 450 page hardcover novel? Especially after they're stated up in the MM (or are they in 4th ed? I remember hearing somewhere that dragons weren't in MM1).

After that kind of infodump I should never have to read another syllable on dragons ever again.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 9:08 am
by Blasted
More to the point, why after the 220 page equivalent masterpiece, do you need a second go at a dragon book?

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 9:27 am
by Username17
Blasted wrote:More to the point, why after the 220 page equivalent masterpiece, do you need a second go at a dragon book?
256 pages. The Chromatic Dragons book is 256 pages and the Metallic Dragons book is 224. The Chromatic Dragons get stats in the Monster Manual1, and the Metallic Dragons get stats in the Monster Manual 2.

I haven't been able to bring myself to read either, just like I have never cover-cover read any of the nWoD expansion splats (Geist is over 240,000 words by itself). But from what I have been told, one of the Dragon books takes time to detail encounters in jungle temples or some shit.

I think it is important to note that the PHBs, the Monster Manuals, and the DMGs are collectively about 1.3 million words long. If you throw in the books like Eberron Player's Guide that have extra core classes, you could have read the combined volumes of In Search of Lost Time by Proust before even touching an expansion option book like Adventurer's Vault or Martial Power.

-Username17

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 2:21 pm
by Lago PARANOIA
Frank, that is just awesome.

If it's not too much trouble, could you do a comparison with the books of other D&D editions? Maybe even other games like WoD and Shadowrun?

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 2:43 pm
by souran
Hmmm,

How many of those pages in the PHB are rules and how many are powers/magic items?

We all know that a lot of space in each phb is taken up with what are essentially page layouts of magic cards. I am curious what happens if you take out all the power that are presented in list format what the word count is? I seem to remember being able to read through the 4e rulebook in much less time than the 3e rulebook (and scads less time than the dense and painful 2e rulebook) because if you don't read the 4-6 pages of powers attached to each class then "rules" for the game seemed pretty brief.

Perhaphs these pages should all be in a "powers index" similar to the spell indexes of previous editions. However, the 4e rulebooks are fundamentally, NOT supposed to be read word for word. The numerous lists inflate word count and the intention was that you coudl play without reading every power. Without adjusting for this this whole exercise seems like saying you can't play magic without having seen the text on every card in the game.

Honestly, including the monster manual is pretty silly. Thats like saying the National Electrical Code is to long. Its a reference document to be utilzied by its specific subsections. There is no need to read it end to end.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 2:44 pm
by virgil
What's the word count on the core book sets for 3.5? If I recall, all three of them were 320 pages; which makes the DMG and MM far larger than their 4E counterparts.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 2:46 pm
by hogarth
Wow, that's just crazy how long those books are.

But I don't think the intent is that you read the DMG cover to cover before running a game; it's a reference book, and you refer to it as needed. That would be like reading the entire "Time-Life Guide to Plumbing Repairs" to fix a leaky faucet. Similarly, you don't need to know every power for every class before starting to play a 1st level fighter. You probably should read every power for every class, just so you know how much certain classes will suck in the future, but I don't think that's the intent.

I have a lot of sentimental memories of browsing through reference books (RPG or non-RPG). For instance, the 1e DMG has lots of interesting useless tidbits, from random prostitute tables, to Boot Hill conversion notes, to the reputed magical qualities of gemstones, to bad advice on using monsters as PCs. I spent a lot of hours happily poring through that book. Ah...nostalgia!

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:02 pm
by Lago PARANOIA
In all seriousness, though, this is the problem when you pay writers by word count. They tend to write up too much unnecessary shit on a page. I sort of understand the underlying thought process behind this, what with wanting to get your money's worth. But it's just too cumbersome and too much of an entry barrier into the hobby.

The future editions of D&D basically has these options at this point:

1) Cut down on the florid pose.

2) Make the prose engaging so it isn't a chore to slug through. This is really hard, since people complain about the length of a Harry Potter novel. You can't rely on just this alone.

3) Rely more on pictures and comics. Full-page pictures of whatever locale or monster you want to whinge on about should be the norm. They don't have to be sprawling mosaics all of the time either. You can save people a lot of reading by, for example, instead of taking up a page to describe all of the sights and attractions of the Friendly Arms Inn using that same page to show a zoomed-out isometric map of the floors and doing zoomed-in insets of what's going on in the Inn. So you'd get a depiction of the 1st floor and a single zoomed-in panel would show the bar stocked with all kinds of wicked-sweet booze, another panel would show filthy adventures sleeping on the floor by the fireplace, another panel would show young maidens splashing each other in the artificial bath, etc..

4) Print an 'Introduction Manual' version of D&D which has the same goal as Intro to AD&D or D&D Essentials. But instead of making this seem like an unconnected product line that has nothing to do with the Big Boyz, every effort should be made to integrate it into the core rules.

Probably the most successful strategy would involve some combination of the above but damn, something should be done.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:15 pm
by hogarth
Lago PARANOIA wrote:In all seriousness, though, this is the problem when you pay writers by word count. They tend to write up too much unnecessary shit on a page.
Certainly some of the content of the 3.5 DMG (say) is unnecessary, but I think that having rules for suffocation and forest fires is a good thing, not a bad thing. And yet I don't think its necessary (or even useful) for a newbie DM to read the rules on suffocation and forest fires before DMing his first game. Maybe that kind of stuff could be put into a hypothetical Wilderness Manual, but I don't think there's anything inherently wrong in having it in one book instead of two.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:58 pm
by Josh_Kablack
Well the 4e power format all but guarantees that each of the key words is used 2-4 times in each power description
Healing Strike Cleric Attack 1
Divine radiance gleams from your weapon. When you smite your
enemy, your deity bestows a minor blessing in the form of healing
for you or one of your allies.
Encounter * Divine, Healing, Radiant, Weapon
Standard Action Melee weapon
Target: One creature
Attack: Strength vs. AC
Hit: 2[W] + Strength modifier radiant damage, and the
target is marked until the end of your next turn. In
addition, you or one ally within 5 squares of you can
spend a healing surge.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 4:53 pm
by Username17
Lago PARANOIA wrote:Frank, that is just awesome.

If it's not too much trouble, could you do a comparison with the books of other D&D editions? Maybe even other games like WoD and Shadowrun?
That seems pretty reasonable. Other companies have much less discipline than WotC, and two books in the same series will often be off by dozens of pages and as much as a hundred thousand words. Where WotC has essentially 3 Supplement lengths (one of which appears to be discontinued), Shadowrun and WoD will come in with page counts in any multiple of eight.

Shadowrun
SR4 265,000 words.
SR4A 300,000 words.
Street Magic 147,000 words.
Augmentation 128,000 words.
Arsenal 140,000 words.
Unwired 165,000 words.
Runner's Companion 139,000 words.
Ends of the Matrix 4.01 55,000 words.
Emergence 100,000 words.
Runner Havens 119,000 words.
Corporate Enclaves 118,000 words.
Feral Cities 118,000 words.

New World of Darkness
World of Darkness Core 205,000 words.
Vampire: The Requiem 233,000 words.
Mage: The Awakening 301,000 words.
Werewolf: The Forsaken 240,000 words.
Promethean: The Created 205,000 words.
Changeling: The Lost 259,000 words.
Geist: The Sin Eating 240,000 words.
Armory 150,000 words.
Book of Spirits 138,000 words.
Dogs of War 88,000 words.
Ghost Stories 90,000 words.
Immortals 99,000 words.
Chicago 323,000 words.
Inferno 116,000 words.
Innocents 204,000 words.
Midnight Roads 90,000 words.
Mysterious Places 100,000 words.
Reliquary 118,000 words.
Second Sight 122,000 words.
Shadows of Mexico 137,000 words.
Shadows of the UK 151,000 words.
Skin Changers 94,000 words.
Tales From the 13th Precinct 103,000 words.
Urban Legends 92,000 words.
Night Horrors: Immortal Sinners 100,000 words.
Ancient Bloodlines 113,000 words.
Ancient Mysteries 120,000 words.
Belial's Brood 101,000 words.
Bloodlines: The Chosen 95,000 words.
Bloodlines: The Legendary 100,000 words.
City of the Damned: New Orleans 99,000 words.
Clan Daeva: Kiss of the Succubus 76,000 words.
Clan Ventrue: Lords Over the Damned 92,000 words.
Clan Mekhet: Shadows in the Dark 81,000 words.
Clan Nosferatu: The Beast in the Blood 78,000 words.
Clan Gangrel: Savage Macabre 79,000 words.
Damnation City 114,000 words.

You know what? I'm not even half done with the WoD books, but I think I have made my point.

Religious Texts
The New Testament (Greek) 138,000 words.
Mission Earth (all 10 volumes) 1,200,000 words.
Koran 80,000 words.

-Username17

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 6:49 pm
by Crissa
I wanna go back to when the Monster Manual was bigger than the DMG and PHB combined. Because it's like an encyclopedia or dictionary - you seriously aren't expected to know every damn monster; but you will need to know most of the PHB.

-Crissa

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 6:56 pm
by TheFlatline
Crissa wrote:I wanna go back to when the Monster Manual was bigger than the DMG and PHB combined. Because it's like an encyclopedia or dictionary - you seriously aren't expected to know every damn monster; but you will need to know most of the PHB.

-Crissa
Yes but you triple your income when you divide the MM into 3 books.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:44 pm
by Crissa
TheFlatline wrote:[Yes but you triple your income when you divide the MM into 3 books.
Just as long as they have a combined index.

-Crissa

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:48 pm
by hogarth
Crissa wrote:I wanna go back to when the Monster Manual was bigger than the DMG and PHB combined.
When was this? The 1e AD&D DMG was way thicker than the 1e AD&D Monster Manual.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 8:10 pm
by Maj
I found this free software for counting words in pdf files, and I counted the words in my three copies of the PHB and two of the DMGs (my 3.5 DMG pdf is all images, not text).
Player's Handbook 3.0 (no glossary or index) 272,144 words
Player's Handbook 3.5 (includes glossary and index) 328,556 words
Player's Handbook 4E (includes index) 210,420 words
DMG 3.0 255,558 words
DMG 4E 155,120 words


Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 8:33 pm
by Username17
Maj, those numbers appear to be consistently on the large size by several thousand words. Maybe it's picking up page breaks as text somehow? I'm not sure. Although some of it can be made up by counting stuff in the index or table of contents as "words" - it seems a little large even for that.

-Username17

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 11:00 pm
by Orca
hogarth wrote:
Crissa wrote:I wanna go back to when the Monster Manual was bigger than the DMG and PHB combined.
When was this? The 1e AD&D DMG was way thicker than the 1e AD&D Monster Manual.
Probably 2nd ed? I remember a Monstrous Compendium which was in ringbinder format so you could add more supplements as they came out.

Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 11:38 pm
by Cynic
So this is a question on how they pay the writers.

Are they using a per word rate? Because that's an exorbitant fee.

Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 12:29 am
by hogarth
Orca wrote:
hogarth wrote:
Crissa wrote:I wanna go back to when the Monster Manual was bigger than the DMG and PHB combined.
When was this? The 1e AD&D DMG was way thicker than the 1e AD&D Monster Manual.
Probably 2nd ed? I remember a Monstrous Compendium which was in ringbinder format so you could add more supplements as they came out.
The first volume was 144 pages, according to this page, and my 2e PHB is 256 pages. So, no.

Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 1:29 am
by Crissa
It was 2e AD&D.

-Crissa

Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 3:36 am
by Maj
FrankTrollman wrote:Maj, those numbers appear to be consistently on the large size by several thousand words. Maybe it's picking up page breaks as text somehow? I'm not sure. Although some of it can be made up by counting stuff in the index or table of contents as "words" - it seems a little large even for that.

-Username17
I linked to the software because I didn't know how it worked. The numbers are literally just raw output.